Poetry Project
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Growth as a Poet
My poem has changed drastically throughout this poetry project. When I first started writing my poem, my poem was very dark and scary. Here is an example of why I thought my poem was so creepy. The world is dark, no one but you Dreams reality your mind is all but through No more no more you hark. As you see in this example my original poem was not very happy I soon realized that this was not the approach I wanted to take. I decided to challenge myself and write a Shakespearean sonnet which is a very difficult poem to write, When I started writing my sonnet the poem was just about cherry blossoms and a man looking at them. As the poem progressed I realized my poem needed more depth to it to make it a true sonnet. I added an extended metaphor which was how people are all looking for perfection and how we all find it in different ways, as well as there will always be push back from others. Every other man will utter critiques , yet perfect form blossoms are what he seeks. In this example it shows how the transition from the dark poem to a much deeper intellectual poem. I think that one of the most important changes that I made was word choices The words I used in the original draft were simple and non-complex which did not add depth to my poem. I changed the words to words that added to the poem's meaning. The lovely Alluring trees are sturdy and mature having pink flowers of the purest form petite fragile flowers do not endure These flowers rarely last the violent savage storm The crystal clear pellucid lake surrounded by trees the blossoms are the way into the gate wake. many peaceful gods breath a gentle breeze petals fall, illuminating the lake A shadowy figure sits rests quietly watching each petal dancing to the ground He is a man of high society contemplating where his life is abound whether his life is sound. every other man will make critiques yet, perfection of blossoms is what he seeks yet perfect form blossoms are what he seeks. Everywhere that is highlighted is where I changed the words to add more depth to the poem. I think that these word choices added a considerably amount of intellectual level to my poem. I believe this to be true because some of the words I chose were complex and some of them you have to look up. The emotional state of the poem has shifted because the word choice adds imagery. As well as a connection between the man in the poem and the reader. The word choices that made, I think overall my the poem stronger and add depth to the poem's overall message. One of the ideas I had for the final line was saying yet imperfect perfect form blossoms are what he seek. I juggled this idea around. I asked myself, would this add depth to my poem or my the reader more confused with this poem. I finally decided to make it yet perfect form blossoms are what he seeks. I believe this line to be more fitting with the rest of my poem. The reader contemplates about how nothing is perfect but, yet in my poem he is searching for perfection. This makes the reader think about the bigger picture of the poem which is how we are all trying to find perfection but perfection is does not exist. Emotionally this line wraps the entire up the entire poem so the reader feels complete. I wanted to make the reader walk about feeling calm and at peace, and I believe this line gives them that sense. Making sure this line made sense was crucial because it is the conclusion, and must have a lasting impression on the audience. While doing this poetry project I competed in a poetry slam. During this poetry slam the vast majority of the poems were about how something horrible in their life occurred and that's what inspired them to write their poem. When I got home that night, I contemplated about why did people define themselves by their suffering. The next day I wrote a spoken poem about that topic. This poem is quite different than my sonnet. The sonnet is much more rigid and has a format you have to follow. Where as the spoken word poem is completely free verse. I felt that both had their challenges with what I wanted to express. In my spoken word poem I add some rhyming but as more of a joke than as a style form. I was being hypocritical trying to be analytical Stop rhyming I meant it, anybody want a peanut In my spoken word I incorporate humor and some deep concepts that lead the reader in an up and down journey. I think I blend the two well so it does not feel choppy and makes sense. Throughout this poetry process I wrote many poems my two favorite were this poem and the sonnet, which demonstrates the wide variety of poetry I can write. Bloom (Shakespearean Sonnet) Alluring trees are sturdy and mature, having pink flowers of the purest form. Petite fragile flowers do not endure. These flowers rarely last the savage storm. The pellucid lake surrounded by trees. the blossoms are the way into the wake. Many peaceful gods breath a gentle breeze. Petals fall, illuminating the lake. A shadowy figure rests quietly, watching each petal dancing to the ground. He is a man of high society, contemplating whether his life is sound. Every other man will utter critiques , yet perfect form blossoms are what he seeks. |